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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

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The
table graph
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table, graph
 illustrates five different types of junk food eaten in Melbourne in 2005, 2019 and 2025
is predicted
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are predicted
. Overall, while the
hamburgers play
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hamburgers, play
 the major role in the eating habits of people, fried rice and noodles preferred the least in Melbourne. In 2005, 40 units of hamburgers were eaten by people and
this
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 year it experienced a slight decrease to 38 units.
However
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, it is predicted that in 2025, 51 units of hamburgers going to be consumed by people. Fried chicken was the
second
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 preferred fast food
in
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on
 the table starting from 35 units and expected to be 51 units in 2025. Turning to the least chosen fast foods, in 2005 only 5 units of salads
were eaten
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was eaten
.
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,
this
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 year,
number
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the number
 of units eaten reached to 15 and according to the table a dramatic increase is expected in 2025 reaching to 41 units.
In contrast
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, in 2005 only 6 units of fried rice and noodles were eaten and small increases are expected
reaching
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to reach
 to 9 units for both kinds of food.

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