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These days, many films and pieces of music are free online. Is this a positive or negative development? Write your reasons and use examples from your experience.

#films #pieces #music #development
As
nowadays entertainment
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nowadays, entertainment
 industry is booming.With the advent of
internet
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the internet
 we can watch any type of film and music online.As
this
 advancement leads to a positive approach
,
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,
but some
megatives
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negatives
negative
also
 to be considered.
Firstly
,
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,
as with the help of internet each and every source of digital entertainment is available online.We can surf anything on the go.
Especially we can
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Especially, we can
Especially as we can
 watch our
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 films and can listen to our
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 music.With
this
 development artists
also
 get lots of benefits.As most of the youth is using the smartphones
,
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,
so when any new artist is want to publish any kind of new songs and films
,
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,
they can publish it online.They get famous too. On the opposite side
,
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,
if the artist post anything on the digital platform
,
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,
they get very less wages.Because everything is available free on the internet. They get
fame but
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fame, but
inspite
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in spite
 of
this
 they
did not
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did, not
 get the amount as per their
hardwork
.Like as number of singers are
their
in or at that place
there
,
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,
who post their songs on their account and
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 an hour they get famous. In the epilogue it is true that entertainment should be of no cost.But some charge should be there.Like
amazon
(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)
Amazon
,
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,
netflix
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Netflix
 and other apps are there which charge the subscription fees to stream and
kind
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the kind
a kind
 of new movie.So artists can earn from
this
 kind of platforms.
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