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Some people think that internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becomes more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Over a decade now,
technology
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 has improved progressively and effectively.
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 some
people
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 argue that
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people
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 around the globe are getting separated from each other, I would strongly agree with the notion of
technology
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 acting as the communication medium all around.
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,
technology
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 has changed the
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 of
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people
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 adversely as they have started overusing
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 in their day-to-day
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, and they have started getting dependent on it more than anything else.
This
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 has,
moreover
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, led to scenarios where
people
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 are getting less interaction with the humans around because of which they remain
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society. In
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,
for instance
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, it has been observed that
people
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 hardly interact with their
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;
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 they have developed a surrounding where no one cares about the person staying next door.
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, these
people
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 feel that stepping ahead and talking to someone without a purpose is squandering their
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.
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, to these supporters, living without interacting with
people
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 around makes the group excluded. Others,
however
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, including me, assert that the use of emerging technologies has brought the world closer, as they can get in touch with their friends and family with just a click.
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, since the
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internet
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the internet
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 has evolved, it has become a crucial connection medium for all types of business because they can get their clients from far distances which is just a click away. It has,
nevertheless
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, helped in boosting the economy of countries by providing a platform for companies to work and a format for the public to get connected, anytime and anywhere. Unlike the times when
people
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 had to struggle to connect with their dear ones and work outside their proximity, the
internet
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 is serving as a blessing for today’s generation
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people
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 to work
according to
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 their capability and to link with their loved ones. In conclusion,
although
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 the
internet
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 has been playing a vital role in the communication between two or more
people
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 sitting long distances, being at a personal or professional level; it has
also
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 resulted in diminishing physical-social communication between humans
due to
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 excess use of it.
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, I firmly believe that we should leverage the presence of the
internet
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 in our lives, provided that the screen
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 is limited to the required use and curb the extra
time
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 to spend on it.

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Word Count

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