The diagram below shows how cocoa beans are prepared for export to countries that make chocolate.

The diagram below shows how cocoa beans are prepared for export to countries that make chocolate.
At the
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first
stage
of the preparatory work of cocoa
beans
before export to countries that make chocolate is
fermentation
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the fermentation
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stage
. First of all, the ripe pod need to be picked from the cocoa trees
then
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and then
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made them become
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beans
and pulp. After that, put the
beans
and pulp
on to
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the banana leaves for 6 days in
sun
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the sun
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. For
this
progress, the
beans
would turn purple to brown. The
second
stage
of
this
diagram is drying. In
this
stage
, the
beans
were raised
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for 10 to 20 days and sack the dried
beans
separately that sent
them
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to the local agent. The
last
stage
of the diagram is export. But before export to the countries, it
need
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to
been took
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weighing and checked for quality. And the local agent would
paid
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pay
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the money to farmers
after
this
work is done. Finish all of
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,
the
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cocoa
beans
can be sent to countries successfully.

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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultivation
  • Harvesting
  • Fermentation
  • Drying
  • Transportation
  • Collection centers
  • Quality control
  • Export
  • Global trade
  • Chocolate production
  • Packing
  • Inspection
  • Sorting
  • Mechanical dryers
  • Mold growth prevention
  • Sacks
  • Pests
  • Diseases
  • Cocoa pods
  • Flavor development
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