the graph below shows the number of university graduatesin canada from 1992 to 2007

the graph below shows the number of university graduatesin canada from 1992 to 2007
The line graph gives information about how many male and female
students
graduating
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graduated
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from university in Canada between 1992 and 2007. During the period shown, the number of
students
in both genders
is
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gradually increased and
this
number is always greater for women than men.
However
, there was an upsurge of female
students
since 2000, which led to a huge gap between these groups in 2007. In 1992, there
was
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were
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only just above 70,000 male graduates and around 100,000 female graduates. In the
next
three years, these numbers rose slightly to over 75,000 men and a little more than 105,000 women before falling down and remaining unchanged until 2000 with the same amount of under 75,000 for men and over 100,000 for women as in the early 1990s. Since 2000, the male group has started increasing slowly
while
the other group experienced a sharp increase and reached its highest point at over 145,000.
As a result
, the difference between
two
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genders widened to 50,000
students
compared to nearly 30,000 in 1992.

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