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Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behaviour and to protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Parents and teachers have always worked hand in hand to mould children into a better
people
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person
. Most of the things that they are teaching may have come from their own experiences, or from how they saw it in other people. There can be no exact number of policies to guarantee that we are leading them in the right path to be a good person and avoid danger. If we set up a lot of rules, it might lead them to go astray.
Instead
 of following the rules, they might go and explore the other route which is forbidden.
On the other hand
, if we don’t give them rules to follow, it might
also
 be a disadvantage to them. Children at a young age are quite vulnerable. They are not yet mature to decide for themselves, and to know what is good and bad for them. Fewer rules would definitely provide children with greater freedom, but being free is not always a good sign of positive upbringing. As a guardian they should be the one responsible in making sure that children are going the right direction.
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 my view I feel that there is no amount of rules can ensure our children’s good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, nor protect them from danger. Giving them lots of rules might result in rebellion.
On the contrary
, being
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tolerant or lenient
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 giving them rules might not
also
 lead them to a good behaviour, because at a young
age they
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age, they
are not be
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are not being
have not been
 yet able to distinguish right from wrong. Whence could encourage bad behaviour, and keep them prone to danger.
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