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the following diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes

the following diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes
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The diagram illustrates a plan for the Peyton garden at the moment and what it will be
in
Change preposition
like in
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 the future
by
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with
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 renovation work. At the
present
Add a comma
,present
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 the map
show
Change the verb form
shows
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 the tennis court
in
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on
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 the left side
from
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of
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 the lake,
whereas
Linking Words
 in the future it will
be remove
Change the verb form
be removed
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 to
right
Correct article usage
the right
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 side
from
Change preposition
of
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 the lake and
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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will be developed the lake through added
swimming
Correct article usage
a swimming
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 dock, and change the picnic area from the middle of Peyton Park in the north to the right side in the north.
Additionally
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, the playground will be added in the Northwest area for children
Finally
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, the parking lot will be staying in the south.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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