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Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. Causes and solutions.

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It is irrefutable that the modern generation nowadays has become less considerate and civil than in
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earlier times. In
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 situation and suggest some ways forward. The most important reason is the disintegration of the traditional joint family system. In today’s nuclear families, there are no grandparents to teach moral values to
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. Parents are busy working and do not spend quality time with
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.
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,
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 become self-centred and uncaring for the world around them.
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, we are part of a consumerist society. We desire to have the latest things and to get those things we are becoming workaholics. We set goals for ourselves and work hard to achieve them.
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 politeness and respect have taken a back seat.
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, we have the influence of the western culture. There, it is considered quite normal to argue and question the elders. The solutions are not simple.
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 at a young age. So,
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 family system should be encouraged.
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, community welfare programmes should be part of
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 school curriculum. We can
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 take the help of media to show programmes which highlight the good points of earlier times and discourage consumerism. But, the final onus is on the people themselves. They should be willing to change. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, in the fast-paced world of today, people have changed and become selfish and
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, but steps can be taken to re-imbibe some virtues of the olden times
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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