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Many parents today employ private tutors to teach their children after school hours. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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There is a trend to occupy the children with
study
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 and race of the higher academic score forced many parents to hire a teacher after
school
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.
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 essay will consider it as a negative development because children give less importance to
school
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 teaching and become a spoon-feeding learner. The importance of
school
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 learning reduces due to many students attend personal
tuition
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 for children know that somebody will teach them with individual attention after
school
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. The private tutor takes feedback from their students and makes sure that children focus on
what
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what's
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 taught.
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, in a
school
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 teaching children
study
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 in a large number of
group
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groups
 in a class which give them a chance to less focus during the lectures.
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, a recent
study
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 shows that 60% of the audience doesn’t like to see the same repeated programs, telecast or lectures if they
already attend
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have already attended
 once.
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, not only does private solo class discourage children for better
learning but
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learning, but
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 lower the value of
school
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.
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 some students have a different level of understanding which could not possible to achieve with classroom
study
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 in a given time; in my opinion, many students use to learn from
one
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 to
one
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tuition
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 only, and they are not able to learn from
themselves
objective case of they
them
.
This
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 situation has generated when student always relies on teacher and do not use their comprehensive skill to understand something and their intelligence curtailed. To illustrate, the University of New York surveyed secondary
school
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’s students in the USA and found a result that out of 70% students whose take
tuition
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 after
school
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 have less IQ even though they perform well in their syllabus.
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 survey shows that students can score higher in their exams, but their learning skills are still limited. In conclusion,
school
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 classroom teaching’s value and children’s ability to
learning
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learn
 by own are
reducing
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reduced
 by the development of private
tuition
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 after
school
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.
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 essay has shown that
one
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 on
one
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 teaching has detrimental developments for children.

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