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Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now?" Give your opinion in no less than 250 words.

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There’s no denying how important a
role
 the
mother
 plays in the upbringing of her children. But torn by modern economics, mothers are leaving home for professional practice, raising the question “
who
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 now takes care of the children?” In my belief, though, all efforts to replace the proverbial
mother
 are destined to be futile. Observing
Nature
, scientifically or
other wise
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otherwise
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, tells us that being a
mother
, if it were a social
role
, is ideally possible by the
child bearing
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 female and others may only be nurses or patrons. The physiological and psychological exclusiveness of the
mother
 means all the other social entities and all the greatness of
science
 and civilization can only supplement, and never replace, her part in the upbringing of children.
Any one
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 else trying to don her
role
 is simply unnatural. But of
course
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 there is
opinion
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in
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 the contrary
also
. Modern
science
 flaunts its
age old
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practice of replicating
nature
 and natural processes. Now more than ever humans and their society are evolving frequently against the tide of
Nature
, and civilization sustains
this
 evolution.
Such
 evolution has
also
effected
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 the socio-economic distinction of men and women. Now in the
industry
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 women are producing as much as men do. So “women are better off in the house” is no longer true.
While
such
 human evolution is true and should morally be supported, going against
Mother
Nature
, when we’re clearly not in a position to, is immoral.
Science
 has not yet found a biological and psycho-social alternative for the natural
mother
. And
while
 gender equality is great, it never means
fusion
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 of the two poles of our species. I don’t believe
science
 never has strived to eliminate sex because it is simply impracticable. So men and women, so uniformly productive as they recently are, don’t have to utilize their worth
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 the same end of civilization. If one person, or sex, is naturally gifted to play a special and vital
role
 in
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society, it is her duty to thrive in it. I
therefore
 conclude that in a child’s
life
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life,
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 its
mother
 is irreplaceable, and,
hence
, it is she who should rear her child
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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