Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now?" Give your opinion in no less than 250 words.

There’s no denying how important a
role
the
mother
plays in the upbringing of her children. But torn by modern economics, mothers are leaving home for professional practice, raising the question “
who
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now takes care of the children?” In my belief, though, all efforts to replace the proverbial
mother
are destined to be futile. Observing
Nature
, scientifically or
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, tells us that being a
mother
, if it were a social
role
, is ideally possible by the
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female and others may only be nurses or patrons. The physiological and psychological exclusiveness of the
mother
means all the other social entities and all the greatness of
science
and civilization can only supplement, and never replace, her part in the upbringing of children.
Any one
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else trying to don her
role
is simply unnatural. But of
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there is
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the contrary
also
. Modern
science
flaunts its
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practice of replicating
nature
and natural processes. Now more than ever humans and their society are evolving frequently against the tide of
Nature
, and civilization sustains
this
evolution.
Such
evolution has
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the socio-economic distinction of men and women. Now in the
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women are producing as much as men do. So “women are better off in the house” is no longer true.
While
such
human evolution is true and should morally be supported, going against
Mother
Nature
, when we’re clearly not in a position to, is immoral.
Science
has not yet found a biological and psycho-social alternative for the natural
mother
. And
while
gender equality is great, it never means
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of the two poles of our species. I don’t believe
science
never has strived to eliminate sex because it is simply impracticable. So men and women, so uniformly productive as they recently are, don’t have to utilize their worth
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the same end of civilization. If one person, or sex, is naturally gifted to play a special and vital
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society, it is her duty to thrive in it. I
therefore
conclude that in a child’s
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its
mother
is irreplaceable, and,
hence
, it is she who should rear her child
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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