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Some people say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work Is hard worknow the key to success, or is talent also important Give reason for your anewer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Some people think the hard
work
 and
talent
 are the most important thing to be successful. They are two important facts, but there are other things to be successful. In my opinion when a person
want
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wants
 to be successful,
talent
 is one of the important factors. I don not have the exact percentage about successful
talent but
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talent, but
 I think everybody
have
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has
talent
. Always they can not find it in their
life
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lives
. In other word they
can not
can not
cannot
 use it well. I think Criss Ronaldo is one of the most successful players in the worldwide. He is famous for his
talent
. In the other hand, hard
work
 is important, too. I think people in my country are lazy and they prefer don't hard
work
.
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.
 In fact, when people or a communicate want to be successful have to
work
 hard for long hours and sleepless.In my view poor people always are working hard and they have a lot of positive points in their mind.So they try to get a successful
life
. As you can see the opinions about the
talent
 and hard
work
, there are other reasons that all of them are helpful to get a successful
life
.
as
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As
 a result, I think money help people to reach their opinions if you use it well. Age, luck and location are other reasons to have a successful
life
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion, I think if a person want to be successful, have to do a lot of factors that in my opinion the
talent
 and hard struggle are the most important of them

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