You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

These days, many youngsters are looking for
best
Suggestion
better
opportunities for themselves for their future prospects. There are some, who
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
that it is best for these adults to reside in their native places., while others contend that it is optimum for them to shift outside their hometown. I agree with the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
statement and in
this
essay we are going to highlight both the aspects of life. To start with, those who suggest to adults to spend their lives in their native
place
, might argue that it can be
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for them as of the
inhabitability
in the
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
.
This
is because, for them the culture and
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
is more familiar compare
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compare more familiar
is more familiar compare
to
foreign land
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foreign lands
a foreign land
. To illustrate
this
, a person can unflinchingly open his business as he is familiar with his native
place
. Another aspect of staying in
hometown
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the hometown
is that local support of families and friends is there.
For instance
, if some misfortune incident happens, it is easy to call family or friend who lives nearby for assistance.
In contrast
, if
same thing
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the same thing
has happened outside his hometown, the help might take some time to approach.
On the other hand
, I strongly
propogate
transmit from one generation to the next
propagate
to immigrate
outisde
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
local
place
as it helps to
widens
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widen
ones
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one's
one
horizon. For starters, it may be difficult to settle in, but for a longer
term it
Accept comma addition
term, it
helps an individual to be more independent on his own.
For example
, a young person settling into new customs and society will have ample opportunity to
grasps
Suggestion
grasp
new knowledge and experiences for his future life.
In addition
to
this
, it will
also
allow individuals to learn other matters of life
such
as saving money to make ends meet and building new relationships. In conclusion, while settling in native
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
may
seems
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seem
helpful because of local support and familiarity
to
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with
the
place
, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that moving out gives
individual
Suggestion
individuals
the individual
an individual
an optimum chance to become independent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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