You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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These days, many youngsters are looking for

best

Suggestion

better

opportunities for themselves for their future prospects. There are some, who

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

believes

that it is best for these adults to reside in their native places., while others contend that it is optimum for them to shift outside their hometown. I agree with the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

statement and in

this

essay we are going to highlight both the aspects of life. To start with, those who suggest to adults to spend their lives in their native

place

, might argue that it can be

benificial

promoting or enhancing well-being

beneficial

for them as of the

inhabitability

in the

soceity

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

society

This

is because, for them the culture and

soceity

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

society

is more familiar compare

Suggestion

compare more familiar

is more familiar compare

foreign land

Suggestion

foreign lands

a foreign land

. To illustrate

this

, a person can unflinchingly open his business as he is familiar with his native

place

. Another aspect of staying in

hometown

Suggestion

the hometown

is that local support of families and friends is there.

For instance

, if some misfortune incident happens, it is easy to call family or friend who lives nearby for assistance.

In contrast

, if

same thing

Suggestion

the same thing

has happened outside his hometown, the help might take some time to approach.

On the other hand

, I strongly

propogate

transmit from one generation to the next

propagate

to immigrate

outisde

beyond the boundary of; external to

outside

local

place

as it helps to

widens

Suggestion

widen

ones

Suggestion

one's

one

horizon. For starters, it may be difficult to settle in, but for a longer

term it

Accept comma addition

term, it

helps an individual to be more independent on his own.

For example

, a young person settling into new customs and society will have ample opportunity to

grasps

Suggestion

grasp

new knowledge and experiences for his future life.

In addition

this

, it will

also

allow individuals to learn other matters of life

such

as saving money to make ends meet and building new relationships. In conclusion, while settling in native

soceity

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

society

may

seems

Suggestion

seem

helpful because of local support and familiarity

Suggestion

with

the

place

, I

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that moving out gives

individual

Suggestion

individuals

the individual

an individual

an optimum chance to become independent.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

315 words

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