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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of mone. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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At some point in
life
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, a person may involve in an unsuitable career or face money problems.
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, there is a debate on
this
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 issue whether it is best to accept the substandard situation or keep struggling to get rid of it and I concur with the l
ater
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
one.
Life
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 is like riding a bicycle, to conquer the goal, one has to keep pedaling without paying heed to the worst states.
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, one can experience unacceptable employment or shortage of capital, but a human being can change the situation in his/her f
avor
promote over another
favour
with enough willpower. If an individual does not try to improve the bad situations and accept the fate, he or she will miss some golden opportunities of making
life
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 more upgraded.
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, the more the thirst for having a
n
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a
ameliorate career, the more a person can acquire a topmost position in the workplace.
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, higher positions in the office mean getting more remuneration and
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 t
he bad
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the worst
situations can be replaced with a
dmired
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admiring
ones. On the flip side, sometimes it is f
avorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
to welcome bad situations in
life
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 to some extent as trying for improvement may lead to even worse cases.
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, it can mislead towards doing mischievous activities that may harm mankind.
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, I once came up with a person who was from a decent family and undergoing some money crisis, and surprisingly, to supersede his situation, he became involved in wrongdoing and the consequences were dreadful. Taking everything into account, I would like to end the discussion by stating that to have an envious
life
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, it is appropriate to vanquish the unsatisfactory conditions in a positive manner.

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