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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the past, people liked to acquire information and news from newspapers. Still, today, thanks to modern technology, we have more ways to do that. Many people consider other methods are better because they are handier, easier and eco-friendly. I think both ways make sense, but I stand for the new approach.
Newspaper
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The newspaper
 is one of the greatest inventions throughout history. People
began
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have begun
 to touch the world via the press since the prosperity of it in the 18th century. At that time, big
capital
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capitalist
 countries like Britain, France and the Netherlands published various newspapers. These newspapers were concerned about different aspects,
such
 as policy, society, health, and so on. Under the circumstances where people lacked advanced equipment, they had no other ways to read newspapers. At present, people have many more alternatives. Newspapers seem to be much less imperative in our daily life. We have different kinds of electronic devices to acquire information. We have mobile phones, tablets, computers and television. These kinds of media revolutionized the way we live. We can turn on our Twitter, Facebook or YouTube and open other websites, and can
also
 sit in front of the television and watch the BBC news. Newspapers are unnecessary
to
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for
in
 the majority. I agree with the point that other media are more effective. According to some research, about 80 per cent of people own mobile phones. It can give us a more convenient and eco-friendly way to read the news. Concerning the popularity of smart devices, reading
on it
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on, it
 is practical. To sum up, we have had different ways to gain news, but the method should keep going with time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news coverage
  • perspectives
  • opinions
  • accessed
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • real-time
  • multimedia
  • combination
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