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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are some good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In modern life, some of the animals face extinction because of
habitat
 degradation so that animal parks where various animals are saved from extinction are debated as an appropriate place for wild animals. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will discuss here. On the one hand, wild animals will get much stress in captivity because they can not express all their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in
this
 place.
For example
, the elephant enclosures which do not fit for them will make them get boredom. If these wild animals feel stress, their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 can change
such
 as more aggressive.
Furthermore
, every wild species have different size of their territories but they
can not
can not
cannot
 have it in animal parks. Another reason is climate concerns since each wild animals dwell in the area’s wildlife with different climate pattern and various weather
such
 as tropics for a rainforest ecosystem. When they are captive animals which are housed in indoor
enclosures but
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enclosures, but
 they actually lead in outdoor areas, its animals will be susceptible to illness and moral problem.
On the other hand
, the zoological garden is
also
 used to research wild animals’
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and health so that when they suffer illness in the wild, vets can heal them. It is believed that animal’s different
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is crucial information nowadays to help their survival in their
habitat
 because of
habitat
 degradation and
habitat
 fragmentation lately. Zoos
such
 as safari parks are a proper place for wild animals on the verge of extinction as they are spared a threat of death,
for instance
, hunters or predators. It is said that animals are bred in captivity so that their population can increase. Overall, confining wild animals is not the best way because they will feel bored and maybe the weather in captivity is not suitable for their
lives
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lives, although
although
 zoos can be used to conduct animal researches which are very useful for animals itself.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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