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As technology helps to gain access to information, fact teaching should be removed and school should focus on developing skills and talents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Thanks to the advancement of technology and the Internet, it has become easier than ever to gain access to factual
information
.
Therefore
, many believe that fact teaching is no longer relevant and necessary in the school’s curriculum, and that there should be a shift towards developing skill sets and capabilities of students. Personally, I partly disagree with
this
 view. On the hand, there are reasonable arguments why the skills and potentials of a student should be a new focus.
Firstly
, almost everyone can afford online resources, rendering the teaching factual knowledge unnecessary.
Therefore
,
instead
 of presenting students facts that they could be self-taught, more importance should be given to boosting personal developments in terms of skills, talents and interpersonal capabilities, which have more practical use of students when they enter the labour market.
For instance
, data analysing and sorting courses could probably be more beneficial than purely fact presenting classes.
However
, if facts learning become inconsequential in school, there will be some possible drawbacks. If left to their own devices, students could leave out many important pieces of
information
, or, even worse, they might completely neglect fact-related subjects.
For example
, if some historical events and landmarks, which are as important as building skills, are the subject to retraction in the school’s curriculum, students may not voluntarily do research on their own.
This
 would make them in the dark about
such
 fundamental
information
, leaving an unimaginable consequences on children’s overall development later in life.
As a result
, along with skills and personal skills being the new highlight, facts teaching should maintain its key role in the education system. In conclusion, in the
information
 era, I believe factual subjects should be given equal importance as potential and skill building.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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