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The government should allocate more funding to teaching science Rather than the other subjects in order to develop and progress.

#government #science #subjects #progress
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I totally agree that education is based on the experiment.Learning is based on the teaching because people are learning through teaching and some people are learning through experience.
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, the government should allocate more funding to teach information because they want new research for the development of the country. Development is supplement important for the country. I believe that other liable is important for social and political point of view. Most of the exams are based on the social science , math
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only the subject we should discover more product and new things. There are ample opportunities for employment in the field of system and technology.
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 degree in technique field. So we should research based on a formula. In another way, studying arts at school or college level helps students to vent out their stress. Some children are splendid in other subjects that does not mean they are not good in another field. The more the job opportunities , to b
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