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The government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree?

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Transportation is playing an important every nation’s development process and
this
 is an essential aspect of our life for mobility which is available used by the general public. I agree with the idea of the governments investing more money on railway systems rather than roads. In
this
 essay, I will examine some reasons to support my ideas.
To begin
 with, using rail line is safer than using roads. On the roads, the city will be an improvement in traffic because of reduction of traffics. They're so not get in stuck in traffic and some accidents with cars on roads while on the line has nothing which can be disturbed the way of trains.
As a result
, people can reach their destinations on time, which means people can spend less time on commuting or travelling due to trains are faster and safer. According to some studies, there are more accidents by around 30 percent on roads than track roads. The government has the major responsibility to make the country more convenience and safe,
hence
 they should invest money in track systems. Another reason is that trains can carry more people and,
also
 they are eco-friendly. They do not emit poisonous gases. Unlike cars or buses which pollute the air. In many countries, train fares are considerably lower than bus fare.
Consequently
, we can reduce one of the serious environmental problems, global warming by reducing the level of carbon dioxide gases.
Additionally
, the number of people with lung diseases can be decreased. To sum up, I support to the idea of the government should spend more money on railways system.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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