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1. Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. "Prevention is better than cure." Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I wholeheartedly agree that prevention is better than
cure
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cure, although
although
 many people might not agree with me. According to me being able to prevent people from getting diseases ranging from the most deadly to even the common ones like cough and cold
is
Suggestion
are
 of great value to the society. Every person in the world wants to lead a healthy and happy life without any diseases. To achieve that the governments of every nation are allocating large proportions of the health budget towards health education and preventive measures which is beneficial for the citizens of the respective nation. People need knowledge of how to avoid getting different diseases which should be provided by the medical world, who have gained that through experiments and discoveries. Prevention is
important but
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important, but
 at the same time finding a cure
also
 needs to be done as prevention might not be able to completely eradicate the disease and people will get sick. The government needs to promote and guide people to take preventive measures as much as possible to minimize the number of cases for any disease. At the same time should not neglect to find a cure for deadly diseases, by providing the required support. The more the government spends on
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 equally
high
Suggestion
higher
 will be the return in terms of profits for the nation as fewer people are getting sick.
Hence
 it can be said that the government should spend a large proportion of its budget educating the people and making sure they follow the guidance to gain the fruits in the future, at the same time it should not neglect expenses on finding cures for various diseases.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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