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some people that children should start primary school later in life, others that they should start before 7. Discuss both views, giving your opinion

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Many years ago, children's
education
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plays
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played
 a vital role in our
life
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. Attending primary schools makes children decide their habits and
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education
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, many children's fathers and mothers think attending primary
school
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 later in
life
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 has its benefits,
otherwise
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, the rest of parents
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 think to send children to
school
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 before
seven
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 years old has its advantages.
This
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 essay illustrates the pros and cons of both children's attendance early or
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late primary
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. At
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, going to
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 in early children's lives makes them more comfortable, know what they want to be in the future, because of that, children decide the subjects they want to study. Another view of that, attending late makes young people more confident and comfortable with writing, because young children have a problem with writing in their early
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. Sending children in a
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of
 primary
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 has
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 its drawbacks. Because young youths in certain
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age they
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age, they
 feel heavy toward
education
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,
however
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,
education
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 should be a lifestyle for them. In the other hand, starting primary
school
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 before
seven
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 years
age
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 comes with pros and cons towards children's. The advantage of
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is makes
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makes
is made
 grown babies makes friends in the
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instead
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 of playing video games all the day. Homework for children distract them
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,
 that makes
moms
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 does housework with less
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effort
. Attending primary
school
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 have some disadvantages, forcing young people to write or read against his will make children abundant toward
education
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 and
that is
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 unhealthy for them in that
age
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. In my opinion, sending children to primary
school
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 later in
life
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 is the best option for them.
because
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Because
 children should decide what they are going to study in
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.
studying
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Studying
 before
seven
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 years old prevent children from that because they don't have the ability to decide the goods for them
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at
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age
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.
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, parents should take care about attending
school
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 either before 7
age
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 or later because the nations get stronger by the wee-educated children. Sending children to
school
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 in different ages in their early lives or before
seven
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 years old come with its benefits and drawbacks
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