At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, some nations have a

highest

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high

higher

population

with

youngest

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younger

people than older. Indeed,

this

fact has both advantages and disadvantages. I opine that positive implications of having a youthful

population

over-weigh the negative ones.

This

essay will discuss the merits and demerits with examples to support both points of view. Unfortunately, having younger people could lead to lack of people who are professionals in the society.

This

is to say that older

population

may be more educated than the young one as they have had more time to study during their lives.

For example

, to become a specialist in physician, at least 10 years of university study

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are

main requirement and

this

may not be able for a young adult because of time and age.

On the other hand

, youthful

population

is in general more active and happier. By

this

I mean, they have less old age- associated illness which

make

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makes

them to work more and maintain them-self to keep active. Adding to

this

fact that healthy people can work more efficiently, with

this

they can contribute to

economy

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the economy

of the nation, making money rather than spending it.

For instance

, it is fact that old society either spends lots of money

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health care for their senior citizen or on some amusement activities. Another positive aspect of youngest

population

is that there are more chances of having outstanding sports professionals.

In other words

, youth is more dynamic and more energetic than

old

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older

people to practice and become sports professional.

For example

, in soccer most players retire from their soccer-career when they turn thirty years old. With old people there would be no time to start a sport career. In conclusion, with the arguments given above, I firmly believe that

advantages

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the advantages

youthful

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the youthful population

population

outweigh the disadvantages. Even though, there are some positive aspects of having an older

population

that we should consider.

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