Some countries are struggling with the increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree?

No, doubt in a few countries
crime
rate
is hiking as compared to
last decade
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last decades
the last decade
. Large number of people hold
this
notion that every street should have a number of
police
as it is the only
way
to tackle with
crime
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the crime
. To some extend I agree with
this
idea, but there are more ways to reduce the
rate
of
crime
. In
this
essay I will discuss other ways to solve the
crime
.
First
of all, it is irrefutable that if a street have more
police
crime
will be reduced,
this
is because of people will afraid from
police
and cannot commit
crime
.
For example
,
this
rule was introduced in India and the
rate
of
crime
was reduced about 80%.
Secondly
, criminal will catch easily and will not do
crime
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the crime
again.
Furthermore
, the other
way
to decrease the
crime
ratio, the state can apply new technologies
such
as surveillance cameras in the streets, shopping centres, restaurants and all public places to cease criminals.
This
method is the best
way
to reduce the
crime
.
Moreover
, strict punishments on criminals can have really preventive and deterrent effects on all age groups in society
,
Accept space
,
so by using harsh penalties like imprisonment, physical or financial punishments the
rate
of crimes can be decreased. With the help of
this
method the other criminal will
also
learn a lesson and will not commit a
crime
. Overall, though increasing more
poli
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eet is the
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to reduce
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but but
but adding cameras and strict laws and punishment are
also
the best ways to inculcate the
crime
rate

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