The media tends to focus on problems rather than positive developments. Some people think that this is harmful to individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We can clearly see that
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nowadays media
focuses
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focus
more on the social problems of citizens rather than positive improvements in the country. Some people think that displaying the problems through
media
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the media
is about to have harmful effects on the society and people. I personally feel that discussing the main concerns and finding a possible solution to them are beneficial for both the nation and individuals.
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, people should be informed about the positive changes as well. Talking from one side, I can say that, these days there are
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a number
of talk shows that are specially organized for the problems of society. They invite people with issues and
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they're thoroughly discussed
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them. During the discussion candidates from different organizations and public consultants give their viewpoints and help a person to deal with it.
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, issues
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a possible solution
in the end when they are announced to the public rather than
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secret. Plus, it encourages major public organizations which work with the population to work more efficiently. Looking from
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different angles
a different angle
, positive improvements interest the population more than the problems. When we are informed about the recent positive progress of our country, we feel more satisfaction and proud. Many people realize that, they are going to be offered better living facilities and job standards and
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inspires them to move
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. Our discussions above show that, when problems are displayed to the public and discussed, they are about to have successful endings with solutions and
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partially contribute to the development of a nation.
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