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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that the uses of conventional
energy
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 like coal, oil and natural gases have been incredibly soaring across the world.
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, some countries are trying to adopt an alternative source of
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 which in my opinion is a positive development since it is pollution-free and cheap. The great benefit of using green
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 power is pollution-free. It is to say that solar
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 and the
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 turbine is produced by sun,
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 and water, so it does not emit hazardous pollutant into the air which causes global warming, unlike the use of fossil fuel. Most European countries like Finland and Denmark have been gradually shifting from non-renewable
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 to renewable
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.
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, a recent study by the BBC news revealed that these countries are in the top list of the eco-friendly countries due to using cars on battery and their use cycles for commuting. Adopting an alternative source like solar and
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 is beneficial because it is profound cheap in production. As the installation of
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energy
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 does not require many funds for the installation, many countries are dependent on other nations to supply fossil fuels.
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, using green
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such
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 countries will be independent and can produce
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 in-house with just low funds.
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, in Bangladesh, which is the smallest country now producing solar
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 with 750MW without relying on another nation. In conclusion,
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 utilization of fossil fuels is expeditiously accelerating, I think eco-friendly
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 like solar and
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 source have countless benefits
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 as they are not costly and do not cripple the environment,
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, they should be encouraged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Economic benefits
  • Energy security
  • Energy dependency
  • Infrastructure investment
  • Intermittent nature
  • Sustainable development
  • Technological innovation
  • Renewable energy sector
  • Pollution reduction
  • Job creation
  • Energy diversification
  • Global energy market
  • Geopolitical tensions
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Energy storage systems
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