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News reports focusing on problems and emergencies rather than positive development is harmful to individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

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He
 media
tends
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tend
 to focus on problems rather than positive developments. Some people think that
this
 is harmful to individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?    It is sometimes argued that mass media concentrate on issues most incompatible for society
life wheras
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life, whereas
life whereas
life where
 others hold opposite opinions towards that problem.    
To begin
 with benefits that can come handy to address certain problems by showing to the public. Obviously, the problems belonging ordinary citizens are shown  in the hope of tacking for
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
, as well as  some of citizens dwelling hardly might be supported.    The media
is watched
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are watching
are watched
 to be aware of going
ons
located at or attached to
on
one
 by most people as well as having a rest by recreational shows organized by
media
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the media
.    
Nonetheless
, the works are being done by
media
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the media
migt
expresses possibility
might
 be found useless for
public
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the public
. As an example, shows that persuade to make huge amount of money by participating
that is
 thought to be unreliable and slacking off valuable means and time.      To conclude, I personally admire to watch majority of them regardless of
unnecessary ones
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the unnecessary ones
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exacerbate
  • skewed perception
  • compassion fatigue
  • indifferent
  • humanitarian crises
  • balanced approach
  • resilient society
  • motivate
  • contribute positively
  • desensitization
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