The tables show the number of mobile phones sold in millions of for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant
The table describes that a number of mobile
phone
were sold in millions between 2006 and 2012. There are divided into three groups; one is that the number of mobile Change to a plural noun
phones
phones
sold of
Nokia and Ericsson went up Change preposition
by
in
about 2 Change preposition
for
years
before going down, and while
the quantity
of mobile Change the quantifier
number
phones
sold of
Motorola tended to decrease significantly from 2006 to 2012, the two brands left had Change preposition
by
opposite
trend.
Beginning Add an article
an opposite
of
selling 345 and 74 Change preposition
apply
million
in 2006, and it was about 2 years
later that the figure
increased to 475 and 102 million
respectively was
Change the verb form
were
tendency
of Nokia and Ericsson. Add an article
the tendency
a tendency
However
, this
trend was gone down in years
left. Correct article usage
the years
Therefore
, in 2012, this
group had the lowest sold
mobile Add a hyphen
lowest-sold
phones
with 335 and 28 million
in the older given.
In 2006, a
number of mobile Correct article usage
the
phones
sold of
Motorola were 210 Change preposition
by
million
, and
Correct word choice
apply
it
is about 7 times as many as the Correct pronoun usage
which
figure
in 2012. In contrast
, the quantity of mobile phone
sold Fix the agreement mistake
phones
of
Change preposition
by
Samsum
and Correct your spelling
Samsung
IPhone
had Fix capitalization
iPhone
tendency
to increase quickly between 2006 and 2012. To be more specific, the Add an article
a tendency
the tendency
figure
of
Samsum and Change preposition
for
IPhone
began from 117 and 0 Fix capitalization
iPhone
million
to 396,5 and 135,8 million
in
turn. That meant the Change preposition
apply
figure
of
Samsum and Change preposition
for
IPhone
Fix capitalization
iPhone
were
nearly 3 times and 136 times as many as for a period of six Change the verb form
was
years
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, years, million, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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