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Nowadays, more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, thanks to the booming development of information technology, online communications like video conferences, meetings, trainings and even marketing are available and have become prevalent in the business world.
in
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In
this
 essay, I’m going to talk about
benefits
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the benefits
 of virtual communication in spite of the fact that it can cause some problems. There are advantages of having meetings and training online. It saves a lot of
time
 and money for the company. Because
company
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the company
 does not have to Allocate money to hold face-to-face meetings.
it
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It
also
 reduces waste of
time
. In
this
 case, the company can take care of
its
the thing named or in question
it
 more essential matters and even employees are able to use the saved
time
 in travelling to spend with their family.
Furthermore
, using online methods, makes it possible to have
multi geographical meeting
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a multi geographical meeting
the multi geographical meeting
 at a specific period without physical travel.
For example
, a person can have a meeting with people located in many different countries during the same video-conference.
To begin
 with the negatives, one of the drawbacks of virtual training is that it is highly relied on the internet connection.
this
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This
 would mean that, to achieve
this
, every attendee in that training session needs a reliable internet or intranet connection.
For example
, in
last sessions
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the last sessions
 of our own class, we have experienced
this
 and some of
students
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the students
 were disconnected due to poor internet connection.
secondly
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Secondly
, people from different
time
 zone probably find it difficult to agree on the
time
 of the conference.
For example
, there is 11 hours
time
 difference between Iran and the USA. To conclude, online engagements, despite some obvious detriments, offer
quicker
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quickness
 and low cost ways of business communications which is
urgent need
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an urgent need
 in nowadays business world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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