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Children learn best by observing behavior of adults and copying it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#children #behavior #adults
Children
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 learning capabilities
depends
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depend
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 on family members' behaviour.They can comprehend potential
skill
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skills
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 by imitating elders.I strongly agree that
elders
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elders'
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behaviour works as a guideline for the
children
 so that they learn from it
while
 growing up. Family members' lifestyle have
vast
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 impact on their
children's
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children
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.first
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First
, When
children
 are growing up
that
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they
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 look up to their parents to learn life skills.For
an
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apply
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instance,
a
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if a
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family member
are
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is
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speaking English at home, their
child
 will
also
 learn to speak English only.
Additionally
 ,
children
 can
also
 learn professional
skill
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skills
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 from elders
like
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apply
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if they
are engage
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are engaged
are engaging
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 in
fishing
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the fishing
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 business
thier
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their
 offspring may learn to make
career
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a career
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 of it.
secondly
 ,
Mother
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the Mother
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 plays
essential
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an essential
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 role in
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the child
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child
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child's
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 education and manners as she
spend
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spends
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 most time with the
Child
.
she
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She
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 is the only one who can
tech
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teach
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 good manners to
child
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the child
a child
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.
Child
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A child
The child
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 can quickly
graspe
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grasp
grasped
 all
quality
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qualities
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 of
mother
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a mother
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.
Thirdly
,
childern
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children
 can learn by seeing and hearing things from adults.
For example
, if
child
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a child
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hear
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hears
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any one
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anyone
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 in the family speaking
bad
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a bad
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 word ,it is possible that he/she will say that in public. People should remain very
carefull
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careful
 around
children
while
 saying any negative words because
children
 can easily learn
it
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them
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.
Lastly
, if a
child
 is living with
youngster
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a youngster
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 sibling or cousin
then
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the upmost
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upmost
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utmost
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 care should be taken by
parent
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a parent
the parent
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 because they can
cause
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bad
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a bad
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 influence on it.To explain in
dept
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depth
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, maybe the youngster is smoking which can give bad ideas to
child
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the child
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 because
chils
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children
 might think that he/she can
also
 smoke after growing up.
To conclude
that
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, It is undoubtedly a fact that
children
 learn from
parents
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their parents
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 . government and
elder
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elders
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 should always remain
carefull
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careful
carefully
 around
children
 so they can be saved from
aquiring
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acquiring
 negative skills.
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