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Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than the private companies. To what exend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is sometimes argued that governments should conduct and manages scientific researches rather than private companies. Personally, I firmly disagree with the perspective for two main reasons.
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 with, governments cannot fully concentrate on scientific researches owing to the fact that they have a lot of on their plate to take care of.
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 leads to undeniable delays in coming up discoveries resulting in inefficiency in nations' growth and development.
This
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 has been evidenced by numerous academic studies the latest of which is one published by the University of Russia in 2019, concluding that private entities can reach the conclusion on the scientific researches 5 times faster than government entities. The study
further
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 shows that the-state-of-art discoveries have been done by the private sectors over the years, as they have only one goal to achieve.
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, political changes in governments can affect the progress of the research due to the fact that every political party tries to conduct its own research to look good on the public's eyes.
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, they stop continuing researches which have been started by previous governors when they elected. As a consequence, there would not any accomplishment.
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, creating a national car brand in Turkey was led by the government, which was started decades ago,
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, there is no progress yet, as every parliament changes the procedures when they start to rule the country. In conclusion, I strongly dissent from the idea of carrying out and controlling scientific researches by governments
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 of private sectors, given the fact that governments have many other issues to rule and politics involve their action.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public welfare
  • profit motivation
  • fundamental research
  • space exploration
  • competition
  • ethics
  • social responsibilities
  • equitable distribution
  • monopolies
  • efficiency
  • agility
  • national security
  • sensitive technologies
  • political interference
  • scientific freedom
  • research agendas
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