Some people argue that governments should spend more money on developing bullet and metro rail facilities, while others support the idea of spending money on upgrading current public transport system. discuss both views and give your opinion

Improving and developing new
transport
system is necessary for each country. It is often believed by some, including me, that rail
authorties
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authority
authorities
should invest their
money
into developing bullet and metros,
however others
Accept comma addition
however, others
have opinion that
money
should be spend
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should be spent
to improve
existing
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the existing transport network
transport
network.
This
essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
To begin
with, public
transport
are not environment friendly. They burn more
fosil
characteristic of a fossil
fossil
fuel and produce
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
of carbon dioxide, which is
extremly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
dangerous for our society.
Secondly
, sometimes trains being delayed and cancelled.
As a result
of
this
passengers become inconvenient because they have to wait a long
time
for the
next
train.
For example
, according to a survey from The Times of India, majority of public
transport
do not run on
time
, which causes longer wait
time
.
On the other hand
, bullet and metro trains are high speed trains. Saving
time
is important,
therefore
individuals can use these
type
of trains to reach at destination on
time
. Another essential point is that, high speed trains are environment friendly. These rails use electric energy to move, which
donot
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do not
produce any toxic gases.
Therefore
, investing
money
in these
type
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types
of trains
are
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is
beneficial for any country in a
longer
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long
run.
Finally
, These
type
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types
of rails are
run
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running
on
time
. Peoples do not need to wait for
arrival
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the arrival
of
next train
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the next train
, which save
lot
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a lot
lots
of
time
for
pessengers
a traveler riding in a vehicle (a boat or bus or car or plane or train etc) who is not operating it
passengers
. To conclude, there is no
deny
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denying
that both
type
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types
of transports are essential for any country. Public
transport
causes many issues
such
as longer wait
time
and less environment friendly,
however
by investing
money
in
metros
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the metros
and high speed train can solve
these problem
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this problem
these problems
in
longer
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the long
run.
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