Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, our country's economy is growing and with the development of the entertainment industry.
Of
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With
course artists working in
this
field have very high salaries, So, many people said that “ Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve
this
unfair situation”. I don’t agree with
this
idea.
Firstly
, Not every artist has a high salary, they must be good, charming and really talented in many artists today to be admired and loved by everyone. At the same time, popular programs on TV now only invite famous and talented artists to participate to attract the following
,
Accept space
,
such
as Tran Thanh and Truong Giang, so there are still many other artists without high salaries.
Secondly
, because of the famous and the high salary that the current artists have to trade a lot of things. They have to work continuously like 24/24 to produce music as well as participate in many different television programs. The most scary thing about being a famous artist is being
actensi
and "digging" into your personal life, both actions and words must be very careful.
if
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If
not it will greatly affect the career, life and even their family.
Finally
, The divide between rich and poor is inevitable in society. Imagine if everyone who did the same job earned the same salary. Imagine and the government controls the workforce and forces everyone to earn the same amount of money. What
this
reduces is the promotion of economic development, effort and creativity in work will not be maximized leading to the
economy
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economic
underdeveloped.

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