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Government give lot of support to artists even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere

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Government has been providing more financial help to artists. While some would argue that
this
 scheme should continue, I believe that those funds should be
instead
 spent on
development
Suggestion
the development
 of other sectors those need more focus. On the one hand, giving the financial aid to artists to help them excel in their career.
This
 is because artists have trouble in making money to meet their month end expenses at starting stage of career
thus
 helping them financially result in focusing on work.
For example
, a report put out by the Times of India shows that the increasing number of experts in classical dance since a decade is due to the aid given by the administration as most of the artisans are switching to another profession because of poor financial status.
However
, I believe that authorities should use money in the sector where there is a lack of
development
.
On the other hand
, it is thought that departments that are falling behind in
development
 need more focus.
This
 is to say that in countries like Uganda, Brazil, and Srilanka, primary and secondary schools do not have basic facilities
such
 as drinking water, restrooms, compound walls, and sanitation
as a result
, children are at high risk of falling ill,
finally
 leading to hospitalization. Utilizing funds in
this
 sector result in improved amenities,
therefore
 ensures student safety.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the UNESCO across the world found that 65% of people desire are that the Government should use money to develop the sector where there is less growth. In conclusion,
although
 giving financial assistance to craftsman and craftswoman helps in career improvement, spending those funds for the
development
 of deprived sectors is a more preferable option.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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