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In the past, people used to wear their traditional clothes depending on their culture. Nowadays the trend is changing and people wear different clothes. Is it a positive or negative development? How does it affect certain societies and people’s behaviour?

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The table compares the
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sale
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sales
 figure of
coffee
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, tea, pastries, and sandwiches, in a
coffee
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 shop in a building on a particular weekday from 7:30 in the morning to 8:30 in the evening. Overall, the total
sale
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 of
coffee
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 is more than any other food items.  As per the
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sale
the underside of footwear or a golf club
sole
 count of beverages,
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 of
coffee
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 is maximum during the
first
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 3 hours since 7:30 am, as 265 cups are being sold. The figure drops to 185 and 145 during the
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 6 hours and jumps to 200 by the end of the given period. A similar trend is followed by tea, which
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 drops from 110 to 35 cups after every three hours, and rises to 75 cups during 5:30 to 8:30 in the evening. Moving towards the
sale
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 of the other two food items, people prefer to eat pastries far more than sandwiches, as only 50 sandwiches are being sold as compared to 275 pastries between 7:30 am to 10:30 am. 
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, after every 3 hours, the trend gets the opposite. Between 10:30 am and 2:30 pm, 200 sandwiches are sold, around double to that of pastries.
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, over 40 sandwiches, 150 pastries during 2:30 pm to 5:30 pm, and 80 and 110 pastries and sandwiches
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ordered
 after 5:30 pm.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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