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Some people believe that modern designs for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such spaces? Give your opinion.

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Having huge empty spaces in educational places and workplaces is trusted by a few people to have in current updated designs. The principal advantages are children will have space to play games and to have few office meetings and the main disadvantages are cleaning and maintenance.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss the importance of having more open spaces and followed by an analysis of problems with the extra open spaces. I will give my opinion in the conclusion.
Firstly
, open places is used to play games and meetings for schools and organisations. Many schools now a days don't have any ground to have physical activities like sports or games so that, children are not physically and mentally strong.
For
example
, we see many kids are very weak and not having a good immune system because they don't have any kind of sports in schools.
In other words
, many school designs are without empty spaces. Where as in offices open spaces are used to have some conferences and get to gethers.
For
example
,
instead
 of hiring hotel or hall, they can use
this spaces
Suggestion
this space
these spaces
 to conduct meetings and parties.
Secondly
, it's very hard to wash and keep in in good hygienic conditions. These open spaces are regularly used by kids so, they should clean in every day and they should have extra workers to do it properly and pay them.
For
example
, Schools should give salaries to the labours who work and maintain it,
this
 will be an extra expense to the management.
On the other hand
, even in the offices they will face the same problem with cleaning.
For
example
, employees should stop working for sometime and allow the cleaners to clear that place and sanitise it. To conclude, school and offices should have more open spaces for lot of advantages by that, but what we think should happen is they should clean and maintain in properly by themselves so that, management no need to spend extra for the cleaning agencies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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