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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the causes behind the less productive
of
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the
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agricultural
land
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 in North America, Europe and Oceania in 1990. It is crystal clear that Europe has the highest percentage of
land
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 degradation, adding to the over-grazing factor that
affect
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 most of the countries around the world. No denying that there are almost four reasons for
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land
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 degradation.
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, over-grazing has the greatest proportion of that cause. After that, both deforestation and over-cultivation have a large proportion with 30 and 28 respectively.
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, other factors have
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 minority with 7 %
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 to all
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, three continents have been affected with less production in 1990. Europe has the highest fraction among the others with almost a quarter of
land
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 degraded which was contributed by one of its
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major causes “deforestation”.
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 North America has a tiny fraction with only 5% that was mainly caused by over-cultivation factor.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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