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Research shows business meetings and business trainings are done online. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Although
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 in the past, most of the work meetings were in the special space and all members should participate there, nowadays by coming technologies in our life, part of these meetings can be online. In
this
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 essay
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have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
am
 going to point out the advantages and disadvantages of online meetings and business trainings. One advantage of having online meetings and trainings, is saving
time
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. In other hand
,
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,
 if you can participate in any online component, you can save a lot of
time
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 before or after the meeting
.
Accept space
.
For example
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, if we have a meeting at 10 am in the office, we should spend a huge
time
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 in the morning traffic.
After
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Over
 long
time
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 that we are so tired we should go to the meeting.
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, we
wont
will not
won't
 have the maximum creativity. So, for saving
time
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, online meeting is the best option that a business manager can make a plan for that. The
second
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 benefit of online meeting and training is
the higher
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the highest
 number of potential participants. It is common that all members can't available at exactly the same
time
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 for the interview or meeting session. Because they don't know what will happen on the way. It depends on traffic etc. But they can use their phone and participate in online meeting from
anywheresuch
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anywhere such
 as
train
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trains
a train
.
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, some people think that online meeting is not effective. They said that during the meeting it happens that we need signatures or take something like physical documents from your co-worker.
This
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 group of people disagree with online meeting because part of the
goals
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goal
 of the meeting session are not achievable. In conclusion, saving
time
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 and participate from anywhere in business meetings are the most important advantages of the online meetings.
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, I agree with
this
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 view. I believe we live in a modern world and it's so important for us that using all technology and save our
time
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 and spent that for catching our other aims.
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