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Many people are doing their shopping on the internet nowadays. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping.

#people #internet
buisnTechnology
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BuisnTechnology
 had brought a lot of advancement to the world in recent times in all aspects including buying and selling
,
Accept space
,
thereby some individual these days now shop from the comfort of their homes.
Although
, it is cheaper, convenient, but it is so unreliable.
This
 essay will discuss both merits and demerits of purchasing goods online. Many Vendors or sellers transact business from home these days with no cost of renting a shop which in turn makes
their
objective case of they
them
 good cheaper than those with stores. Goods are displayed online, customers will select, make payment via electronic transaction and get their products delivered.
For example
, Instagram nowadays are now majorly used for business purposes other than entertainment. Another advantage on the part of the buyer is that it is more
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 as it won't be necessary to be physically present at the store.People
now shop
Suggestion
are now shopping
 from their comfort zone. One of the disadvantages of shopping online is that products might not be as original as displayed as the buyer is not physically present to feel the texture. Authenticating the originality of online goods is impossible.At the same time delivery system might be delayed,
thus
, cannot be used in cases of emergency.
For Example
, it takes 21days for some stores to send out deliveries after payment, in view of these Materials needed urgently can definitely not be procured. The cost effective benefits and palatable online shopping
provides
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provide
definitely
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definitions
 makes it acceptable by
people though
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people, though
,
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,
at the same time the authenticity of
product
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a product
products
 which cannot be guaranteed is not left out.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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