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the followig diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

the followig diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.
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The diagrams illustrate what
Peyton
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 garden looks like now and what it will look like after
renovation
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renovations
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 are made.
On both
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 maps show the
lake
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 at the centre of the park,
while
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 the parking lot is located
on
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in
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 the south of the park. In the current map, the
tennis
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court
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 is situated off the west of the
lake
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,
whereas
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 the picnic area
of
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on
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 the north of the
lake
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also
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is also
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 close to the
tennis
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court
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. There are some things it will be removed and some new things it will be added. The
tennis
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court
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 is will be removed to the east end of the
lake
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 and the picnic area will be changed to the northeast of the
lake
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 and stay close to the
tennis
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court
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,
whereas
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 it will
added
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add
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 new area playground in the northwest of the
lake
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as well as
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 added swimming dock in the west of the
lake
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lake, tennis, court with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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