Some people think that government should not give international aid since they have disadvantages people like unemployment and homeless in their own country. To what extent do u you agree or disagree?

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Some experts believe
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that the international
aid
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by the
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don’t compulsory, while the
government
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should ensure their society with
work spaces
space allocated for your work (as in an office)
workspaces
and homes. I completely agree
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that
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kind of scheme would be a good idea. There are several reasons why
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I
would argue against the international
aid
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by the
government
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Firstly
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instead
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of
encourage
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encouraging
other countries with the material
aid
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, the
government
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should allocate the own budget on the society in order to create the
communities
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community
community's
communities'
life
efficiently
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efficiencies
efficiency
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Secondly
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the
government
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should keep in
mind even
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mind, even
the trade in order to
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enhance
inside and outside economic
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If the
government
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has an ideal
economic
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economy
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it will have a great deal of financial opportunities to increase the education and employment opportunities with creating the new modern work buildings
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hospitals
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schools
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kindergartens and
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
aspects
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For instance
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the development country Dubai consists the lowest amount of homeless and unemployment peoples in the worldwide
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because their central mission is
devoting
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devoted
to the disadvantages of population
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On the other hand
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the
government
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should provide the humanitarian
aid
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to the country in difficulty time period
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Demonstrating a help
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the governments reinforce the social relationships and it gives the ability to have the good cooperation
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For example
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nowadays the virus as Covid -19 is ruled in the worldwide
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all countries have an isolation
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The humanitarian
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as
medicines
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medicine
preparations were sent
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from
Uzbekistan to Turkey
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China and Afganistan
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In conclusion
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primarily the
government
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should take the attention to the society
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than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
to the other countries
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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