The followig diagrams show a current map of peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

The followig diagrams show a current map of peyton park

and a plan for proposed changes.
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The maps show what Peyton Park looks like now and what it will look like after the proposed changes are made . On both maps , there is a
lake
at the
center
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of the park . Both maps
also
show a parking lot to the south of the
lake
. Now Peyton Park has
tennis
courts
to the west of the
lake
and a
picnic
area to the north of the
lake
. The
picnic
area is
also
close to the
tennis
courts
. When the proposed changes are made , some things will be moved , and some new things will be added . The
tennis
courts
will be moved to the east end of the
lake
. The
picnic
area will
also
be moved . It will still be near the
tennis
courts
,
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but to the northeast of the
lake
. A swimming dock will be added at the west end of the
lake
. There will be a playground to the north of the
lake
, where the
picnic
are
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area
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is now .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words lake, tennis, courts, picnic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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