The graph compared the amount of Beef, Pork, Broilers meat and poultry consumed in US in from the year 1955 to 2012.
Overall
beef
and pork were initially
most
popular Correct article usage
the most
type
of meats. Fix the agreement mistake
types
In contrast
, the figure for broilers
and turkey
were fluctuated
in the Change to the active voice
fluctuated
have fluctuated
pried
(1961 and 2012).
In the first Correct your spelling
period
year
(1955), the amount of Beef
was
increased significantly Unnecessary verb
apply
while
the figure for Pork was
dropped slightly, with 60 and 50 Unnecessary verb
apply
pounds
/person
respectively. There reach in peak in 1976 with 90 Change preposition
per person
pounds
of Beef
. In contrast
, Pork consumption
was fewer
than Correct quantifier usage
less
Beef
which was approximately at
40 Change preposition
apply
pounds
/person
. There Change preposition
per person
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
fluctuated
, Replace the word
fluctuation
at
40 Change preposition
to
pounds
by 2012, the
amount of Correct word choice
and the
Beef
was
fall gradually, to nearly 50 Unnecessary verb
apply
pounds
/person
. At the beginning in
1961, Change preposition
of
Broilers
and Turkey
consumption
appeared, from 5 to 50 pounds
, respectively.
Broilers
and Turkey
consumed gradually, for the years 1989 to 1991, in one-yearly intervals. In the year
1994, the consumption
of Broilers
took over from Turkey
Change noun form
Turkey's
consumption
50
Change preposition
of 50
pounds
/ person
Change preposition
perperson
while
there were
15 Change the verb form
was
pounds
/ person
Change preposition
perperson
by
Change preposition
in
Turkey
consumption
. In the rest number of year
, both Correct article usage
the year
of
Change preposition
apply
consumption
(Broilers
and Turkey
) fluctuated. At the end
of the year
(2012), the amount of Broilers
surpassed Beef
, at 55 pounds
/person
Change preposition
per person
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, broilers, turkey, year, pounds, person, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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