Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

The given pie chart indicates the causes of why lands and agricultural areas degraded. Meanwhile, the table shows the reasons of degradation in terms of different regions in 1990s. Overall, while there are a number of reasons for becoming lands less productive, namely over-grazing, deforestation, over- cultivation and others, it can be seen from the table that these causes varies differently
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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