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The data sources clearly communicates the proportion of divorce rates in two countries (Finland and Sweden) over the four-year
period
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.  Overall, there was an upward trend in Finland's divorced rates, while the opposite trend can be seen in Sweden's proportion throughout the
period
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. It is
also
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 noticeable that Finland overtook Sweden in the end of the
period
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. In 2011, the percentage of divorce rates in Finland
was
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were
 around 37%,
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 it experienced a small drop by roughly 3%, to nearly 33% in 2012. Finland's rates climbed to nearly 40%, reaching a peak at above 40% in 2014 and steadily remained for the rest of the
period
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.  Sweden's divorce rates started at nearly 45% in 2011,
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 it increased slightly and hit a
hight
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
 at around 50% in 2012. The figure decreased gradually to approximately 40% in 2014, ending at about 38%
in
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at
 the end of the
period
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