The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays

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traditional communicate is being replaced with social

converstation

the use of speech for informal exchange of views or ideas or information etc.

conversation

using

social media app

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the social media app

a social media app

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such

facebook

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Facebook

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zalo

any activity that is performed alone without assistance

solo

sale

cello

instagram

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This

trend would

introduced

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introduce

both side

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but

refers to the speaker or writer

think

benifits

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the benefits

benefits

of using social media have brought to our lives are overweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand

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it is clear that social media bring about

serveral

(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many

several

drawbacks

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People who using online media are dependent on the stability of the Internet

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For instance

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when the internet connection

have

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has

a problem is it

extremly

to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect

extremely

hard to

countinue

continue a certain state, condition, or activity

continue

converstation

the use of speech for informal exchange of views or ideas or information etc.

conversation

In addition

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there are some people use social networking by many wrong way or overuse it too much. Young people

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are being

the model of people who do

this

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many

conflits

an open clash between two opposing groups (or individuals)

conflicts

happen just because they are dissented and

strate

successive (without a break)

straight

street

state

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their phone when they have dinner with family without paying attention to people around them. On the

orther

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

outer

others

hand

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there are many

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

of online

converstation

the use of speech for informal exchange of views or ideas or information etc.

conversation

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Fristly

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Firstly

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people using it can easier keep in touch with our loved ones who are different for them to interact face - to - face

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For example

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students studying aboard can keep in contact with their family

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friends on

daily baisis

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a daily basis

daily basis

using video call of

social media app

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a social media app

social media apps

such

as sky

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facebook

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Facebook

...

Secondly

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social media is

also

a powerful tool in education

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Students who do not conditions or can not

antend

be present at (meetings, church services, university), etc.

attend

an tend

face-to-face classes will be easily replaced with distance learning where they are carried out over the internet or by post. For

practicial

concerned with actual use or practice

practical

example is in

this

year 2020

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virus Covid -19 is compel almost schools in the world suspend operation in a long

time so

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time, so

that distance learning always the best way for everyone who are studying to ensure safety and still have basic knowledges

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Finaly

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Finally

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the

informations

a message received and understood

information

that social media brought to people should mention

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For

exemple

an item of information that is typical of a class or group

example

examples

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It will be easier and faster to get daily news about

covid

overlaid or spread or topped with or enclosed within something; sometimes used as a combining form

covered

curved

- 19 via social networking In conclusion

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there are many minus points of social media

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However

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its

the thing named or in question

seem

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seems

to me that drawbacks are outweighed by

benifits

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the benefits

benefits

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