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The majority of news being reported is bad news. Why do you think this is? Should bad news be banned?

#majority #news
The circulation of news is of paramount significance to every
indivual’s
a human being
individuals
individual’s
individuals’
lives
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life
 in
this
 dynamic world.
However
, the anomaly is that an ever-increasing amount of bad news – natural calamities, corruptions, civil wars, traffic accidents and so on – more than often dominates the headlights and press coverage. From my perspective,
this
 phenomenon results from people’s preference for depressing stories and events over positive ones. Needless to say, spectators’s predilection for bad news is the main reason why
such
 news
are
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is
 everywhere. Numerous experiments show that we react more quickly and sensitively to tragic stories or sudden disasters than auspicious events. The reason for
this
 is rooted in human nature. From the dawn of
history human
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history, human
 ancestors acquired an inherent vigilance for potential dangers. That instinct appears to be still
existent
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existed
existing
exist
 in
this
 sphere of our lives, which prompts us to look out for negative signs.
In other words
, our tendency towards bad news simply reflects our caution for threats. On top of that, high ratings and reactions of morose stories provide an outlet for our desire of “negativity” in
such
an
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a
 “perfect” world. Most people hold a cynical view that there is
alway
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
 hidden “dark” sides to seemingly “light” stories, that the world is not so nice as it seems, that the people are not so kind as they seem.
Therefore
, any breaking news that threatens to destroy long - lasting images of prominent figures like politicians and businessmen is magnet to
public eye
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the public eye
public eyes
. The distrust and cynicism among people is so great insofar as “...
any
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Any
 printed lie that any notorious villain pens,
although
 it militate directly against the character and conduct of a life, appeals at once to [our] distrust, and is believed” – Charles
Dicken
a word used in exclamations of confusion
Dickens
. Though
this
 disproportion amount of negativity in the media may have harmful effects, it should not be banned.
Such
 urgent issues as imminent natural calamities are a matter of life and death to many people,
therefore
 they should by all means be
precautioned
a precautionary measure warding off impending danger or damage or injury etc.
precautions
 by mass media.
Instead
 of banning, a more practical approach could be to bring more happiness - induced stories to the fore and limit the
cirulation
the human act of creating
creation
 of dismaying ones. In
this
 way, people will not only avoid frustration and atrocity accumulated from too
much
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many
 reported negative
news but
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news, but
also
 be able to keep abreast of vital current affairs. To recapitulate, an
eliquibrium
a stable situation in which forces cancel one another
equilibrium
 between good and bad news is necessary.
Therefore
, the circulation of news should be regulated meticulously.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Negativity bias
  • Sensationalism
  • Ad revenue
  • Mental health
  • Censorship
  • Ethical considerations
  • Overexposure
  • Constructive news
  • Balanced reporting
  • Societal morale
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