The diagram bellow shows the proses by which bricks are manufactured for building industry.
The diagram reveals the proses
how
are produced bricks for Change preposition
of how
building
industry. There are a few steps, from digging with special techniques to delivering ready production.
Correct article usage
the building
The first step is
that digger takes clay and put into
special metal gird. After that clay Correct pronoun usage
it into
jump
down to Change the verb form
jumps
soothing
place which is Add an article
the soothing
roller
surface and is moving Correct article usage
the roller
next
standing
via Change preposition
to standing
this
roller face. And at this
point, add some sand and water in order to mix well. After being mixed, it is moved to a special box via special
crack and Correct article usage
a special
go
out another crack Presley condition. Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
Subsequently
, wire cutter chops were the Presley clay option size and appear air-brick.
In order to dry, air-brick
Correct article usage
the air-brick
Add a missing verb
is move
move
to Replace the word
moved
drying
oven and there stay Correct article usage
the drying
24
-48 hours. After that, start 1 moment of drying Change preposition
for 24
moderate
temperatures, which are 200°c---980°c. Change preposition
at moderate
Following
this
2 Correct determiner usage
these
point
, consider high temperatures from 870°C to1300°C. And Fix the agreement mistake
points
then
they cool next
during 48 - 72 hours Change preposition
in at
at
Correct your spelling
a
cooling
chamber. Add an article
the cooling
Finally
, this
brick packaging to special
van and they are delivered to be needed building areas.Correct article usage
a special
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