Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
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have outweighed
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of all, an undeniable fact of charging individuals in this
case will be strongly support the ar
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some
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support can even develop people’s talent to flourishing their arts more. Secondly
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and their building by these income Suggestion
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need
Secondly
, museums can hire more staff to with a wide range of related information to guide more accurately visitors about the pieces which depict. Although
some extra facilities can be provide like some welcoming drink in entrance gate or hire some guards to assure visitors securi
ty or maybe by developing some facilities for elderly visitors, like wheelchairs.
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issue could be solve by res
trict the number of museums which need to be paid or even by decreasing the price of entering so it could be more reasonable for a great number of people.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite