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International air travel has a negative impact upon the environment and should therefore be restricted.

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In the modern life, plane or helicopter is one of the most popular forms of transport.
However
, international
air
travel
 causes a bad effect on the
environment
 and should be limited. I agree
this
 view, but I can find some benefits of using
air
travel
. I think that there are many drawbacks. If people don't limit to
travel
 by
air
, the quality of
air
 will be not affected. Because planes, helicopters which are
air
 transports need to consume a large amount of fuel, they emit lots of CO2 into the
environment
.
Therefore
, our health which is very important to us can be affected too.
Moreover
, CO2 can turn the clear atmosphere into foggy.
Therefore
, the sight of people will be narrowed and the beauty of views in the city will be worse.
On the other hand
, I can see some benefits if people use
air
travel
. Because when you
travel
 by
air
, people can spend less time than use public transports. If people want to go abroad or move with far distance, they can easily find several suitable flights for them to choose.
Moreover
, using means of transport is not comfortable as
air
travel
. Because plane always has many various services, they make passengers feel pleasant during a long trip. Other factors which make the
environment
 more polluted is aware of people. Because they always throw the trash in the rivers, road.
Moreover
, they burn them so the CO2 emissions from wastes which
also
 affect to fresh
air
. In conclusion, travelling by
ai
r always h
Accept comma addition
air, always
as advantages and disadvantages base on ways of people’s using. I think we should use more public transport
instead
 of travelling by
air
.
Therefore
, we can protect our
environment
.

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