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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology has become an indispensable part of human lives. It is believed that some
people
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 who are living in the contemporary era will never feel isolated as they are provided with online communication.
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 would make it even easier for them to make new
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. I do not entirely agree with
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 statement and will explain the reason in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
people
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 can interact with one another anywhere and anytime just by clicking a button on their mobile phones.
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people
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 do not feel much about distance between them. International students, an example, call their parents and family and can connect within seconds by using different platforms like WhatsApp, Instagram, and Facebook.
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,
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 make
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 as well using
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 applications.
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,
people
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 may still face loneliness even when they find
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 online.
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, it is not possible all the time that individuals you meet online will be trustworthy like your loved ones.
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,
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 of becoming a support for the person, they can commit fraud on emotional and financial levels.
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, research shows that
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 are having stress and depression,
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 they have a huge list of
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.
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, one might not feel comfortable to share own sorrows with others rather than blood or close relations. In conclusion, even though the technological era has made our life easy by providing a new way of communication, it is still behind in keeping individuals out of loneliness as
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 do not feel it right to communicate their happenings with others over the web and since no one can replace loved ones,
people
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 find it harder trust someone easily.

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Ensure that your argument maintains a consistent perspective and that you explore both sides if you choose to partially agree with the statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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