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It is better to get advice from older people than young people .Agree or disagree ?

#advice #people
Most people believe that older people
gives
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give
effencient
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
 advices
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
than than
 younger individuals
.
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.
I believe that older generations
has
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have
 more experience of
life
 because of that they can give superior
advice
.
First
 of all, elder
have
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had
has
 already their
life
 so that their
advice
are
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is
 beneficial. All older people have
life
 experience so they know that what can be done in difficult situations.Adults, who living with their
gran dparents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
grand parents
 seek advices of them in taking important
life
 decisions
for example
, if a person is about to start his career, he will ask his grandparents or parents for profession
advice
instead
 of asking youngsters
.
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.
thus
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Thus
 we can say that
elders
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elder's
elders'
advice
are
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is
 extremely important
.
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.
Secondly
, Elders advices are
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 in leading countries as well. That means if a country
are a
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
area
 community is facing any difficulties
,
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,
the older people can provide
fruitfull
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
 solutions
.
Accept space
.
For an instance
,
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,
 To qualify for
an
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a
 political leader position in most of the countries
,
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,
 it is
mandetory
required by rule
mandatory
 that he/she is 50 years or above
.
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.
To explain in depth, old generation have
calm and composed mind
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a calm and composed mind
 in order to take
rightful desicision
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a rightful decision
rightful decision
 for a country benefit
Thus
 younger generation are not qualified for nation leaders
postions
the particular portion of space occupied by something
positions
. To conclude that
,
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,
 all older
generations people
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generations, people
 can provide us best knowledge
o
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
to
life
 with their
life
 experience.
However
, one has to always remain careful in acquiring
advice
 from other people. .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • modern challenges
  • peer advice
  • long-term perspective
  • contextual relevance
  • diverse perspectives
  • generational gap
  • mentorship
  • cautionary tale
  • evolving societal norms
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